At first glance to your story, it can be seen that you have used wide range of vocabulary and grammar respectively

At first glance to your story, it can be seen that you have used wide range of vocabulary and grammar respectively.

Learning your story in detail, it can be said that there are some grammatical inaccuracies as well as you have made some mistakes on the grounds of fluency. This is because of the fact that you couldn`t connect the sentences logically.

However, You used collocations properly and this allows the reader to understand without difficulties.

Overall, you have done a good job. Keep going on working on your mistakes.

Well Done!!!