Extra felicity O’Dell fce

Examiner comment
Content
This candidate has clearly understood the task and
addresses the necessary points in an appropriate way. 
Accuracy
There are inevitably some grammar and spelling mistakes
but there is nothing that interferes with communication. 
Range
There is some good use of a range of language e.g. ‘I’m
writing to thank you for inviting me to give a talk ...’ and
‘So as to display how plantlets should be taken care of,
I would be needing a video player.’
Organisation and cohesion
The letter is appropriately organised with good attempts
at linking.
Target reader
Would have the information they need – though there
might be a bit of clarification needed with regard to the
dates.
Band 4
Candidate B
Dear Danni
Thank you for the previous letter. I really enjoyed to
talk about different people’s hobbies and leisure
activities. I had an idea of having a jogging activity
for you English club. Jogging is good for you because
it make you feel refresh and good for you health.
This jogging activity is better to have in the morning
or evening.
Then, I have also think of a special requirement for your
club. It is to have a video player in your English club.
There are advantages for buying a video player. Your
English club members can watch video at their free
times. They can also improve their English by watching
video at the same time. If you buy a video player. You
can borrow a video tape instead of buying them.
I apologise that I will not be able to come on 2nd
May or 16th May. I will be on vacation with my
friend at that time but I can come in July. By the
way, there is also someone who might be able to
speak your club in May. Pete Lawson, who was my
friend, is a good speaker. He likes to have talks
with English clubs.
So I should think great ideas for your clubs and I
am looking forward to meet your club in July.
Your faithfully