Extra felicity O’Dell fce

Examiner comment
Content
This candidate could not pass this part of the
examination because he does not do the task which
was set. He has misunderstood what was expected of
him and so cannot pass, even though he does give
some evidence of being able to write in English. 
Accuracy
There are a number of errors which students should not
be making at this level e.g. ‘I really enjoyed to talk about
...’, ‘Jogging is good for you because it make you feel
refresh and good for you health’, ‘I have also think of ...’ 
Range
This student does not give much evidence of being able
to handle a range of vocabulary or structure.
Organisation and cohesion
The task is organised as a letter, but there is little
effective use of cohesive devices.
Target reader
Would be rather confused.
Band 1

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TEST 1
Paper 1
Sample scripts
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TEST 1, Part 2, question 4
Candidate A
Dear Lynne,
How are you? I hope you and your family are well. I
think you have done well in your exams. I received your
letter, asking me to describe the school that I go to.
My school is very popular in our city. It is very good
at keeping discipline, taking care to students. Every
year our school students pass exams with flying
marks. In my school, there are three buildings. The
main building stands in the middle of the compound,
the two others lie at the back of the main building. In
front of the main building, there is a tennis court
and a big garden. They are kept very well. The school
is situated in the middle of the city. There are about
6 thousand students and four hundred teachers.
Fortunately, all the teachers are well trained.
Classrooms are well furnished. There is a also a
library in our school, which is very famous among the
schools. We also have a play ground at the back of
the school. Last year, there were a lot of funds in our
school, so head mister decided to upgrade a
playground to the football ground. So, this is about
our school. Most of the school in Myanmar is like our
school. This is a typical Burmese school.
This is all about our school. OK! Bye for now!
Please reply me.
With love,