Extra felicity O’Dell fce

Examiner comment 
Content
This candidate gives a good picture of their school. They
do not say much about whether the school is typical of
schools in their country but they do deal with it enough
to make it clear that they understood this part of the task.
Accuracy
There are plenty of inaccuracies in this letter but these
come usually when more ambitious language is
attempted e.g. Talking about passing exams ‘with flying
marks’ rather than ‘with flying colours’. There are also,
however, some more basic errors with articles and with
is/are in one case. Nevertheless, it is always clear what
the candidate wants to say.
Range
There is some evidence of range.
Organisation and cohesion
The letter is well organised and reads like a natural
informal letter.
Target reader
Would be informed.
Band 3
Candidate B
Dear David,
I recieved your letter last week. I’m very glad to see the
photograph of you and me which you sent with the
letter. By the way, I noticed that you would like to know
about a typical school in our country in your letter.
The school I am still going is the public school.
Although it is a public school, there are lots of
good teachers and many activities. It is located in
a quiet town. The compound is really gigantic with
lots of buildings. The time-table is also well
organized. As the school is in a quiet town, it has
a good atmosphere. We can’t even hear the sound
of car horns so that we can learn peacefully and
quietly. The period which most of the pupils in our
school is the physical exercise time we can choose
on of the sports and can do during that period.
In our school, you can choose one of the foreign
languages and can learn at school. The are also some
computer labs, library and language lab. Our school is
known as the school which has a nice football team.
I think this is so much, for now. I hope you will know
much about our school. I think our school is a typical
school because there are lots of activities, located in
a good quiet town with good atmosphere and
convenient.
Your best friend,