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Nevertheless, 
(1)
we do not have to look far for
evidence that obsession with sport can hurt
relationships, frequently cause financial problems as
money that could be spent on more essential things
is lavished on the expenses involved in following
your team and is a major contributor to anti-social
behaviour such as binge drinking and violence
towards others who are seen as ‘enemies’. 
(2)
When
interest in sport reaches this intensity, it is clear that
something essential is missing from an individual’s
life. Watching sport can be exciting and a way of
bringing people together. Too often it is all-
consuming so that fans lurch from extremes of
despair to joy, depending on their team’s fortunes. It
is a diversion from real life problems so that when
you are following your team, you can put out of
mind serious issues in your life that need to be dealt
with. 
(3) 
Many marriages, for example, have
foundered on the rocks of sporting obsession. 
(4)
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In conclusion, then, 
(1)
I would argue that there is a
distinct danger of too many people becoming over-
obsessed with watching professional sport. 
(2)
Statistics
show that the number of young people actually
playing sport has diminished, as the nation becomes
largely watchers rather than players. We do not
want a situation where the country is divided into
two main groupings: professional sportsmen and
women on the one hand and the spectators on the
other. It is primarily a male problem, but the
number of women who are obsessive sports fans is
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growing. There is the issue of the nation’s health as
well, with an increasing number of young people
reaching obese proportions because they do not take
enough exercise and eat too much junk food. The
government must take responsibility for providing
more sports facilities and offering wider cultural
opportunities for young people especially. 
(3) 
Measures
like those might stem the remorseless tide towards
our becoming a nation of sporting couch-potatoes. 
(4)