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The photograph or picture that moved me the most is 
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Response #2
The picture I remember is Guernica. It is by Picasso. It is not reelist. That means the shapes don’t look real but
you know what they are in real life. It is in black and white. It is not in color like most pictures. But it really gets
to you. It shows people getting killed or who are already killed. The images make it so you won’t forget it.
What this picture does is to make you know that war kills people and it is just awful. A baby is killed and a
soldier is killed. A mother is screaming because her baby is dead. It kills people and it kills animals and even if
you are not killed you will probly be screaming or crying. There are lots of ways that life gets destroyed by war.
The painting shows many of them.
This picture could be for any war it doesn’t matter. In that way it is a universal message. There is not any-
thing in the picture that tells you where it is happening. You don’t know who the people are. There are wars hapen-
ing today. People suffer now like in Guernica. You remeber it because it makes you upset and you wish there would
never be a war. Then people wouldn’t have to suffer. This picture is memrable because you remember how the peo-
ple suffered and they probly didn’t do anything.
Assessment
On a scale of 1–5, this essay received a 2. Organizationally, it has three paragraphs and each contains a main idea.
However, two of them also include the introduction and conclusion. While they don’t detract from or confuse the
author’s ideas, there are numerous errors in grammar and spelling. Most sentences are very short, and the lack
of variety detracts from the essay. A strong point of view is maintained, but it gets lost in the unsophisticated and
overly informal vocabulary.