The happiest day is my eighteens birthday

My happiest day
The biggest happiest day ever…that would describe my eighteens birthday!My parents surprise me with a party at the restaurant. There were many gifts from my friends and family.It was wonderful celebration. It all started with the fact that no one mentioned my birthday half day so I figured everyone had forgotten it.I was shocked when my mom drove me to the restaurant and when we went there everyone jumped shouting “Surprise” only close friends and family was invited.Later my parents gave me the best gif.It was the laptop I really needed.As you can see my eighteens birthday was a most memorable day for me.The party at the restaurant and very special gift made it a happiest day.
Self-assessment
1)What outline does the writer use for this essay?
Topic sentence Main supporting sentence Main detailed sentence Summary sentence
2)Is there any connecting sentence/sentences between opening statement and thesis statement?
There is no connecting sentence
3)How do the paragraph organized? Are they supported with details?
There are enough details in this paragraph
4)Does the general topic sentence state the main idea of the paragraph?
Yes, the general topic sentence tells that the happiest day is my eighteens birthday this is the main idea of ​​the paragraph.
5)Find the transitional words and copy them. Are they used effectively?
There is no transitional words
6)Your recommendation to the writer:
To use more transitional words and connecting sentences
7) Evaluate the essay by 5-scale marking system:
Mark-4