The writing resource packet

P:
You have a good start with your 1
st
two main points and the structure down. 
Q:
Can you provide specific situations/references to your own life to spruce up all your 
examples in this essay? Where are the 4 parts in your TS sentences? 
P:
Put the main topic in your 2
nd
and 3
rd
topic sentences, get specific and stay on one clear 
topic in all your examples, clearly showing why your family is important to you, and rework 
your entire concluding paragraph. Make sure everything you say answers “Why is your 
family important?” Make one CLEAR point in each example.
Expand
all your 
examples
4 parts 
of the 
TS? 
TS/CS 
Rule 
for all? 
Vary your word 
choice throughout 
this essay 
Where do you 
tie everything 
back to why 
Important? 

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Scott Victor 
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last updated: 9/4/2013 
Group Peer-Editing and PQPing Check List 
 
Directions: After the group has Peer-Edited (sentence by sentence, using constructive 
comments and praise) and PQPed another group’s paper, answer the following questions in 
detail with specific locations in the paper to what the group can do to fix/improve their paper. 
Make sure you are very specific with what needs to be done to improve the paper! Use the 
backside of this or your own paper to answer the questions. 
1. Is the introduction interesting? Does it grab the reader’s attention, briefly discuss the topic in 
general & logically lead to the thesis? If not, how and what can be strengthened? Be specific 
with your answer. 
2. Does each paragraph have a clear purpose? Does each sentence contribute to that purpose? If 
not, where and what is not clear? Be specific. 
3. Does each topic sentence state its main idea directly without being too broad or too narrow? 
Is each (TS) connected to the main focus? If not, which one (s) need attention and what 
suggestions can you make for improvement? Be specific. 
4. Are there enough details, facts, specific examples, or reasons to support each of the main 
ideas? Are each of these the strongest points that could be made? If not, where are there 
weaknesses & how can they be fixed? Be specific.
5. Are there any sentences that merely restate the main idea of each paragraph instead of 
developing/ explaining/proving the point? If so, where are they and how can they be 
improved? Be specific. 
6. Are the body paragraphs coherent—that is are the paragraphs and sentences clearly and 
logically connected to one another through the use of repeated words, synonyms, and 
transitions? If not, where should improvements be made & why? 
7. Does each point in the body paragraphs refer to the thesis and focus? If not, how can they be 
connected? Be specific. 
8. Is the essay well organized and coherent? Does it flow? Is it focused? Is the information 
presented in a logical manner? If not, what can be done to fix these issues? Be specific. 
9. Is the conclusion strong? Does it rephrase the thesis in new words, summarized the key points 
in the paper, and leave the reader with something to think about? If not, what and how needs 
to be improved? 
10. Are all the words appropriate for the intended audience? Is the correct person used? If not, 
what needs to be changed and why? 
Note
: 
Before the group final draft is printed, check sentence structure & variation, 
wording, spelling, capitalization, punctuation, grammar, indentation, correct use of the 
identifiers. Also, make sure all names are on the typed final draft, there is a catchy title to 
the paper, you have reviewed the necessary rubrics to make sure you’ve written to the “4” 
score in all areas, and you have thoroughly proof read the paper.
 

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Scott Victor 
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last updated: 9/4/2013