Written by Uztemirov Vahob

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Written by Uztemirov Vahob 
In some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes rather than buying them.
( Advantage vs disadvantage) 
The preference of renting a home predominates on purchasing it directly in some nations 
of the world. Although there are loads of drawbacks of it, some beneficial sides can also be 
seen and this essay will illuminate both benefits and bad aspects of the argument. 
First of all, engaging an apartment can 
be helpful for us to avoid paying
mortgages of a 
home because tenants are hold under an agreement to pay a rent instead. 
Another
advantage of renting an apartment is that tenants have an occasion to move into anywhere 
they want to live if the facilities aren’t satisfactory 
enough 
to live properly. In detail, 
the
p
eople 
who
live in a flat 
are less likely to 
worry about home, kitchen and bathroom 
appli
a
nces that are really necessary in our daily routine. According to some studies, there 
may be more comforts people can use in their apartment whilst although they haven’t 
enough finance to buy them. Air conditioner or freezer is one of the quintessential 
vindication to the advantageous factor of the matter uplifted. 
However, the main 
drawback 
of no
t 
having a home is that even it can’t be called your 
“own” what it is heard lovely. Hence, landholder 
can
exclude the tenant when he/she wants. 
If the owner of a home didn’t banish the tenants, they wouldn’t be able to change almost 
anything they want to do. Occasionally, painting the walls or decorating your rented home 
is also impossible because of landholderʼs unreceptive character. Another visible fault of 
renting a flat instead of buying a home is the 
condition in which 
your guests who have 
visited you due to
specific occasions, 
such us a 
birthday party may feel a sense of 
uncomfortness
to stay longer in your leased place. 
To conclude, many people have a tendency to live in a flat or an apartment owing to 
some profitable and acceptable traits where
a
s 
it is not pretty nice to live in this kind of 
situations. 
This candidate has addressed all parts of the prompt and presents a clear position 
throughout the response. Main ideas in body paragraphs are presented, extended and 
suported. Ideas and information are presented logically. There is a range of cohesive devices 
(First of all/ instead/ However/ Hence/ Another visible fault of/ To conclude/ whereas ). 
The range of vocabulary is wide enough to show some precise meanings and also shows less 
common items (predominates/ illuminate/ mortgage/ tenants/ quintessential vindication/ 
landholder). There are some errors in appropriate word choice and in the structure of 
coplex sentences.
This candidate may achieve a Band 6.5 or a Band 7 at best. 
Checked by Shahzod Abduraupov.