See a much better example
This paragraph uses exactly the same ideas and most of the same language. It is though much. much better.
There are various reasons why more people are suffering from stress today. One is that the pace of life nowadays means that we do not always find time to relax. Likewise it is difficult to find a good work-life balance due to the pressure to produce results at work. Another related cause of stress is the need to earn money to survive in our more and more commercial world.
You should see that there is a much wider variety of grammar and vocabulary here – not just one repeated structure:
Reasons
Here are three different linking phrases to avoid using reason. If you look at my notes, they use slightly different techniques each time.
One reason is → One is [just delete the word – it’s surprising how often this works]
Another reason is → Likewise [use a connecting word to avoid repeating the word]
The final reason is → Another related cause [use another word]
Because
Again , here are three different ways to avoid using because too much.
because of the pace life → the pace of life means that [think about using a verb instead]
because they are under so much pressure to produce results in their job→ due to the pressure to produce results at work [due to is one good synonym]
feel stress because they need to earn money because the world we live in is more and more commercial→cause of stress is the need to earn money to survive in our more and more commercial world. [this one just uses cause instead of because]
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