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Table of content 3

Introduction for Essay Types 4

To what extent do you agree or disagree 5

Do you agree or disagree 7

Discuss both views and give your opinion 9

Why is this happening? What can be done to tackle this? 13

Mixed questions 16

Linking words for task 2 19

Linking word exercise. 19

Quick guide to Punctuation 20

Punctuation in compound and complex sentences: a short note 21

Synonyms 23

Academic words 23

Introduction for Essay Types

There are several types of essays that you will have to write when you appear on the exam:

To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Do you agree or disagree?
Discuss both views and give your opinion
What are the advantages and disadvantages?
Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
Why is this happening? And what can be done to tackle this problem?
Why is this happening? And what problems does it cause?
Is it a positive or negative development?
What is your opinion?

And others

All of them are plain-sailing, and are not a rocket science, which means you don’t have to mix the Sumalak and tell your wishes to God to get high score. Instead, you have to work a little bit harder and go the extra miles, you will eventually become an unstoppable writer and getting 8 or even 9 from writing will be as easy as testing the Sumalak with your finger. Please go through and read my model essays and try to analyse them minimum 5 or 6 times (attempt to write same type of essay by looking at my essay). Each time you check my essays make sure you target different things. For example, one time analyze the essay for overall understanding, second time for structure, third time for vocabulary, forth time for linking devices and so on. BUT, you need to READ a lot! Let’s get down to business!

To what extent do you agree or disagree

This is one of the easiest IELTS essays and it should have 4 to 5 bodies. Please keep this in your mind that to get around 7.0 to 8.5 you need to write 4 paragraphs with strong explanation (most of the time you don’t have to write examples). If your target is around 8.5-9.0, then you will have to make a structure that is different compared to others. Let’s see the question first!

QUESTION: MAINTAINING PUBLIC LIBRARIES IS A WASTE OF MONEY SINCE COMPUTER TECHNOLOGY IS NOW REPLACING THEIR FUNCTION. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE?

First, understand the question and think how you can paraphrase it! N.B. you don’t need background sentence, nor have to talk about technology, simply paraphrase it. Please always structure your essay, look for ideas, question yourself about the question. For me, should I were you, I would link them, public library and technology, together and neglect nothing. I mean that we should give money to libraries and buy computers and other electronic gadgets as well. In this way, I am hitting two rabbits with one bullet (uzbek idiom).

In your introduction you need to:

Paraphrase the question in one sentence
Thesis- whether you agree or disagree (please be carefull, in this question type they are asking you “to what extent”, which means how much do you agree or disagree? So you cannot say “I disagree” it is WRONG, you should say I completely agree or disagree. DON’T say I PARTIALLY agree. It implies that you are not very sure what you are going to write.
Mix your thesis with your outline- your reasons to why do you completely disagree or agree. You must give two reasons (sometimes, you can also give ONE reason that includes two or three sub-reasons. For example, I love to go to EVOS because they have amazing food (amazing food can include lavash, hamburger and doner plate), so you don’t simply have to say I love to go to EVOS because they have amazing lavashs and hamburgers! Let’s see my introduction!

It is now thought that stereotypical libraries are not worth to invest as their key role is wholly being taken over by technology era. In my opinion, I completely agree that libraries should receive a capital injection in technology since it enables them to encourage more people and offer greater knowledge as well as opportunities.

Here, I totally agreed and provided three reasons. I don’t have a background sentence and I’m not talking about Technological era either. Look CAREFULLY to the reason of opportunities, it means I will write about two or three opportunities in my third body. So my essay has a total of five bodies: 1-Introduction, 2- First body about encouraging more people, 3- second body about offering greater knowledge, 4- third body about opportunities and the last 5- conclusion! See the 2^nd body!

Firstly, through kitting the central hubs for obtaining knowledge out with new technology a lot more people can be attracted. In other words, if libraries invest in state-of-the-art equipments, computers, iPods and other electronic gizmos, the number of their members will soon rocket. As a result, public libraries will not only become invaluable community resources but also places to work, study and learn.

Here, I don’t have an example because I can think of a strong explanation instead of spending my time for example which is very simple and everyone can do. It does not mean that you should not give example (but not always). Look at the linking devices: firstly, in other words, as a result. I have an “if sentence” as well as “not only… but also” which are enough to score more than 8. Let’s see the 3^rd body!

Another point to consider is that employing the various digital tools, teachers, librarians and shushing staff can offer students as well as others increased access to knowledge and innovative opportunities. That is to say, the use of computer-mediated communication assets would certainly enable everyone from diverse geographical locations talk to one another and experts. Thus, technology-rich experiences allow us to extend learning beyond the limits.

Just LOVE it!

Finally, adapting to the latest technology will also help public libraries offer more extended hours and even seven-day access. This will allow members of libraries to take and return books using unmanned scanners. Furthermore, fines for overdue items will be abolished.

Here I am talking about extra opportunities that only technology-rich libraries offer, for example, 7 day access and scanners which don’t need human help and others. DON’T forget linking devices whenever you start your paragraph as they give a clear picture of your paragraph about what you are going to say. I used FINALLY because I wanted to mention my finaly-last points. And let’s see the conclusion!

In conclusion, by standing in the way of tech boom as well as offering increased access and twenty-four seven operating hour, libraries can invite more people and boost knowledge acquisition. Therefore, it is not only for governments to support libraries financially but also private companies, they should embrace CSR.

In conclusion you need to restate- re-mention your points and reasons one more time and also you should provide recommendation or prediction (it depends on the essay type, some require prediction and some are better off with recommendation). As I said earlier you need knowledge. A lot of people always put responsibilities on the shoulder of government and I urge you not to do the same, instead think differently. I said here private companies should also donate some money for libraries. Please google CSR and read it! Let’s see my essay as a whole! Read it read it until you understand it!

Model Answer by: Baha

It is now thought that stereotypical libraries are not worth to invest as their key role is wholly being taken over by technology era. In my opinion, I completely agree that libraries should receive a capital injection in technology since it enables them to encourage more people and offer greater knowledge as well as opportunities.

In conclusion, by standing in the way of tech boom as well as offering increased access and twenty-four seven operating hour, libraries can invite more people and boost knowledge acquisition. Therefore, it is not only for governments to support libraries financially but also private companies, they should embrace CSR.

Please learn the vocabularies I have used in my essay.

Do you agree or disagree

The only difference between to what extent do you agree and disagree is an “ADVERB”. It means in “do you agree and disagree” type of essay you DON’T say I COMPLETELY agree, say I AGREE (no completely). Let’s look at the examples!

Introduction for “do you agree or disagree” essay type:

It is now thought that stereotypical libraries are not worth to invest as their key role is wholly being taken over by technology era. In my opinion, I agree that libraries should receive a capital injection in technology since it enables them to encourage more people and offer greater knowledge as well as opportunities.

Introduction for “To what extent do you agree or disagree” essay type”

It is now thought that stereotypical libraries are not worth to invest as their key role is wholly being taken over by technology era. In my opinion, I completely agree that libraries should receive a capital injection in technology since it enables them to encourage more people and offer greater knowledge as well as opportunities.

QUESTION: MAINTAINING PUBLIC LIBRARIES IS A WASTE OF MONEY SINCE COMPUTER TECHNOLOGY IS NOW REPLACING THEIR FUNCTION. DO YOU AGREE?

Model Answer by: Baha

It is now thought that stereotypical libraries are not worth to invest as their key role is wholly being taken over by technology era. IN MY OPINION, I AGREE that libraries should receive a capital injection in technology since it enables them to encourage more people and offer greater knowledge as well as opportunities.

In the following page I have given a model essay for you to analyze.

QUESTION: SOME PEOPLE THINK IT IS A GOOD THING FOR SENIOUR MANAGEMENT POSITIONS TO HAVE VERY HIGH SALARIES COMPARED TO OTHER WORKERS OF THE SAME COMPANY OR ORGANISATION. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

Model Answer by: Baha

It is thought by some that senior managers should be entitled to seven figure salaries and I totally agree with this since they are the vital assets of companies with great leadership as well as vision creating and sharing skills.

Firstly, it is the only leadership skill that matters in order to guide the extraordinary performing teams which are the ultimate advantage for any organisation. In order words, state-of-the-art products or services might get the companies into the game, but only seniors can inspire the teams that can deliver victory and create a wall that is higher and harder for competitors to climb. Therefore, leaders should enjoy lavish pay as it is the one way of keeping them satisfied.

Another point to consider is that executives, yet positive ones, always attempt to see and establish a brighter and better future. At the moment, sceptics often scoff and fail about leaders as these individuals see what is positive and take the next steps to rally and unite people to create it. Steve Jobs, Mahatma Gandhi and Sir Henry Parkes always tapped into the power of a vision and found a way forward. Executive packages only bestowed a freedom upon them to do what they loved.

Finally, there is a fine line between senior level managers and other employees. That is to say, the efforts, opportunities and benefits brought to the table separate the CEOs from the rest. However, lower level workers should also get paid well depending on the amount of work and value they add to their organisation.

In conclusion, top level managers ought to receive hefty paycheques due to the skills they possess. Nevertheless, other staff members should not be offered stagnant income which might in turn pose serious threats to the overall performance of the company.

Discuss both views and give your opinion

This is also another easiest IELTS essay type and is totally different from the previous essays we have learnt together. In this sort of essay you should talk about both sides and at the end, right before the conclusion, you should provide your opinion in one separate body. Let’s kill it!

QUESTION: SOME PEOPLE THINK IT IS GOOD TO MARRY FOTIMA AS SHE IS BEAUTIFUL, OTHERS DISAGREE AND CLAIM ZUHRA IS BETTER AS SHE IS A GREAT COOKER. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.

It is an amazing question and what you have to do is understand the question. Even though you like Fotima or Zuhra more you have to talk about both, and in your opinion paragraph you can talk about Zuhra because she is a great cooker and beauty is temporary and lasts long maximum 15 years and you don’t want to eat worst food for the rest of your life. Either you can give your opinion in introduction or later before your conclusion.

It is thought by some that Fotima can be a great life partner as she is as beautiful as Madonna, there are others who think Zuhra is the best because she can cook fantastic food. In my opinion, I believe that Fotima is good for those who are a fun of beauty, while Zuhra is pefect for those who love best home cooked meals. (here your opinion should be happy marriage)

Let’s see another yet more academic example.

QUESTION: SOME COUNTRIES ENCOURAGE TEENAGERS TO HAVE A PART-TIME JOB AND SEE IT AS A GOOD THING, WHILE OTHERS DISAGREE. EXPLAIN BOTH SIDES AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.

Question yourself here, how can you connect both sides? Suppose that some of your friends are requesting to have lunch at Choyxona and others are willing to go to Evos and here is the LUNCH that can CONNECTs each CHoxyona and Evos. In this case, your opinion should be “In my opinion, I believe that choyxona is good for those who love Uzbek tradition food, while Evos is an another great choice for fast food lovers” and that is it! Let’s come back to our academic question and write an itrodcution.

In this case, it is the future job, future careers of the teenagers that CONNECTS both sides and see my introduction:

It is considered by some governments that teenagers should take on a part-time job, while there are others that encourage them concentrate only on their study. In my opinion, I believe that having teenage jobs are essential for having future jobs that require more experience, while solely being involved in study is more useful in the fields where knowledge is the cornerstone.

In my introduction, I am emphasizing that both sides are good and right because teenagers should work as they will gain experience that is essential for their future jobs. And they should not work because if they want to be a doctor because they have to study very hard as they need only knowledge. If you want to be a businessman then work and get knowledge and be involved with real world or if you want to be a doctor go to library work flat out and buckle down. You need FIVE bodies in this essay type.

Introduction
First side
Second side
Opinion
Conclusion

Let’s start the first side and talk about the teenagers that should work.

On the one hand, in some countries, teens are supported to have jobs that introduce them their preferred career after school is over. In other words, they can gain important introductory experience in business or any other field which is greatly reliant upon experience. At the moment, HR managers look for candidates who understand work environment and work well as a part of a team.

DON’T use FIRST because you are not talking about two similar points back to back, Instead, use “On the one side” since you are talking about two totally different sides. Having a good topic sentence and jaw-dropping strong explanation are perfectly enough. “at the moment” is also another way of starting your example. Here, I mixed example with result- At the moment, HR managers look for candidates who understand work environment and work well as a part of a team”(so I am showing here how experience is crucial to have a career prosper). Let’s see talk about another side, which is opposed to the former side.

On the other hand, it can be difficult for youth to find the correct balance, which means they inevitably have challenges to juggle school as well as a job. As a result, they will end up allotting more of their time to working rather than attaining knowledge which is crucial for their future career.

It is great to use “on the other hand” (as we have used “on the one hand”) when starting another side. This is very same paragraph like the one provided above. Here, you should explain the second side of why students should only study (what I am saying here is that teenagers should only study because it is essential for their future profession, which means if they work and do not know how to balance their work and study, they will end up wasting their time and will not be able to get sufficient knowledge). Now you have discussed both sides and what you have to do now is to give your opinion. Let’s see make it!

Finally, in my opinion, whether teenagers should have a part-time job or not depends on their dream job. Take for example science, teaching or medicine, it is impossible to work in these fields without sufficient knowledge. In contrast, in business, it would be more important for candidates to have experience as this allows them to step into a position quickly and be of immediate benefit to the company.

Try to use “finally” linking word as it is the final paragraph in your essay. Here I am playing smart and including both sides in my opinion and look at the example. Both views are CONNECTED under one point- Future job/dream job/future profession. You can even talk about one side from your perspective (it is totally fine). Please always give example to your opinion so as to support it and make it strong. Now look at the conclusion:

Simply paraphrase or restate your opinion paragraph and give recommendation or prediction.

In conclusion, future profession should be at the centre of attention when deciding whether teens should be encouraged to work or not. Governments and educational authorities should make sure that teenagers will obtain adequate experience and knowledge which guarantees a bright future.

Do not use I will reaffirm my position ect (you lose mark) because it is cliché and millions of students learn them by heart. Your writing should be natural. After restating your opinion you have to give recommendation or prediction!

Governments and educational authorities should make sure that teenagers will obtain adequate experience and knowledge which guarantees a bright future.

The above sentence is my recommendation and I am saying that governments and other educational authorities should support teenagers to have enough experience and knowledge so that they all will be successful. The end!

Let me give you two of my essays here for you to analyze.

QUESTION: SOME COUNTRIES ENCOURAGE TEENAGERS TO HAVE A PART-TIME JOB AND SEE IT AS A GOOD THING, WHILE OTHERS DISAGREE. EXPLAIN BOTH SIDES AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.

Model Answer by: Baha

It is considered by some governments that teenagers should take on a part-time job, while there are others that encourage them concentrate only on their study. In my opinion, I believe that having teenage jobs are essential for having future jobs that require more experience, while solely being involved in study is more useful in the fields where knowledge is the cornerstone.

In conclusion, future profession should be at the centre of attention when deciding whether teens should be encouraged to work or not. Governments and educational authorities should make sure they obtain adequate experience and knowledge which guarantees a bright future.

QUESTION: SOME PEOPLE THINK THAT CHILDREN SHOULD START FORMAL SCHOOL AS EARLY AS POSSIBLE WHILE OTHER BELIEVE THAT THEY SHOULD NOT START UNTILL THEY BECOME 7 YEARS OLD. DISCUSS BOTH SIDES AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.

Model Answer by: Baha

Some consider that kids ought to start their entire school days early, while there are others who think it is better if children take their first step into educational world later, namely at seven. In my opinion, I believe that early education is good for children as they tend to be eager to learn, whereas delaying school entry is important for acquiring some vital skills. (65 words)

On the one hand, children at early ages are like sponges in a stage of absorbent mind. In other words, in this unconscious creation stage, they are eager to learn everything and use their senses such as nose, ears, eyes and hands to soak in all things that surround them. Therefore, parents need to spot the early signs of innate, inborn curiosity of their kids and capitalize them by directing, shaping and forming their need to learn and continue their learning in a nurturing environment. (85 words)

However, a later start of school is of profound benefit to develop an executive function, which involves several crucial skills needed for children to succeed not only in academic field, but also in real world. That is, through creative play and watching their parents create and adhere to routines, nurture relationships and interact with others children will be able to possess self-regulating skills, which indeed would allow them to prosper in every walks of their life. Hence, if children are given an extra year away, this will hopefully help them foster the vital skills. (94 words)

Finally, in my view, the best age for children enrolling in school ought to be determined based on their ability. For example, if a child has social skills and knows how to cope with change as well as can dress and act unattended, he or she is then ready to attend school irrespective of the age. So parents ought not to hold their children back from school regarding their age when they are capable to learn and thrive. (78 words)

To conclude, it is not the age that to be overlooked when deciding child’s school age, but the ability, and parents should put it at a higher priority. (29 words)

Why is this happening? What can be done to tackle this?

The above and other similar questions (why is this happening and what problems does it cause?) are called issue discussion essays (some people call them problem and solution, cause and effect and so on). If you really understand this section of our book, you will write any other identical types of essays by walking in the parking or on the bus right driving your home. Before explaining, let me give a question which we are going to write a model answer for:

QUESTION: IN MANY COUNTRIES, THE TRADITION OF FAMILIES HAVING MEALS TOGETHER IS DISAPPEARING. WHY IS THIS HAPPENING? WHAT WILL BE THE AFFECTS OF IT ON THE FAMILY AND SOCIETY?

Now it is a bit tricky question because it is asking you to give reasons to why families are not having meals together and next, you cannot give suggestion as you are not asked “what can be done to change/tackle it”. Instead, you have to write about what are the affects (negative impacts) that can be occurred on the family and society if families do not gather around family tables. Did you get it? ALWAYS you MUST understand the QUESTION. If you don’t understand the question wholly, how you wanna write the best answer. In your introduction you must:

Paraphrase the Question
Give two reasons why is this happening
Provide affects (you don’t have to mention it specifically). Just say: there are effects which might occur consequently. Let’s see my intro!

Virtually in all parts of the world, families are not gathering around the table to a meal together (I paraphrased “in many countries, the tradition of families having meals together is disappearing). This is mainly because of the nine to five grind trap and social media (now I have given two reasons why families are not having family meals together which are 9 to 5 grind and social media) and there are effects which might occur consequently.

Now let’s look at the first main body right after your introduction in which we have to talk about the reasons including 9 to 5 grind and social media.

Firstly, the reason for most people not being able to glean the real pleasure of family meals is due to the lack of potentially needed when escaping the rat race. In other words, individuals are attempting so hard to reach the apex of the career ladder and allotting more time to work. As a result, families are being torn apart by adopting a rather hectic lifestyle. Secondly, most families are not eating together is also owing to the era of social media. At the moment, people are devoting hours to Facebook where all family events, whether these are happy moments or not, are shared with public. This leads to a transparency of relationships and thus creates an endless cycle of problems.

So whenever you start talking about your first reason try to use linking words like “firstly”, “first” and others (don’t use “to begin with” you are not writing process or diagram which comes under task 1 type of essay). Give your first reason which is here “firstly, the reason for most people not being able to glean the real pleasure of family meals is due to the lack of potentially needed when escaping the rat race”. Then you have to explain it in a way that is full and strong enough so that you don’t need an example. Use “in other words” or “that is to say” when you are going to explain your topic sentence/reasons. Let’s explain our reason more deeply “in other words, individuals are attempting so hard to reach the apex of the career ladder and allotting more time to work” here you should definitely need a well-stocked vocabulary in order to drop the examiner’s jaw and take him or her aback. Although you don’t have good vocabulary, you still have the chance to get 7.0 or more than that. After explaining your reason try to give a result to support your explanation (you don’t need to restate your reason again because you have already restated it in introduction and in your body so why restate it over and over. It is just bunkum. Let’s give the consequence which may occur because of spending more time on work and not on a family: As a result, families are being torn apart by adopting a rather hectic lifestyle. Always use “as a result” or “as a consequence” when you are showing the consequence. You will get 2.25 mark for your linking words as they make your essay coherent and cohesive (CC). You should apply the same for your next reason and your second reason should look like:

Secondly, most families are not eating together is also owing to the era of social media. At the moment, people are devoting hours to Facebook where all family events, whether these are happy moments or not, are shared with public. This leads to a transparency of relationships and thus creates an endless cycle of problems.

Next, you need to put two effects in one body like you have done above and the structure MUST be the just same. Your two effects should look like this:

Disappearance of having family meals together will not only affect the families themselves, but also the societies. One effect may emerge through the lost of love and joy. Since the family members do not spend more time for each other, the bonds between them will morph into weak ones and this in turn will lead to high rates of divorce and even out-of-wedlock childbearing. Another effect, to societies, might happen because of putting too much independence on children. Busy parents often fail to bring up their beloved ones as they have less time to be around with them. As a consequence, children will go astray and start associating with wrong groups such as terrorists and criminals, which pose severe threats to our society.

When you are moving from one paragraph to another one don’t forget to give one introductory sentence that gives the reader an idea of what you are going to say. For example, you have talked about “Eshmat tog’a” in one paragraph and in the very next paragraph you want to talk about “Sheshmat tog’a” give an introductory sentence like “regarding the next super otaxon who is Sheshmat tog’a” and go on explaining. Now let’s write the easiest part of the essay, which is conclusion. You, in your conclusion, need to include:

Restate your reasons and effects
Give recommendation or prediction.

Let’s look at our conclusion!

In conclusion, the typical nine to five office jobs and social media are resulting in families not eating a home cooked meal together and this indeed is affecting families and societies severely. However, these can be tackled if people find a correct balace and put family values above everything by not neglecting the career prosperity.

Your introduction and conclusion should include normally 2 to 3 sentences. Staying busy with job and social media are the two reasons of why families are not eating together and if we continue the same, families and societies will be under jeopardy. So we need to find a correct balance in work and life, and appreciate and spend more time for our families!

Mixed questions

In this type of essay you usually have two action words, which means they will ask you to answer to sub-questions. Let’s see the example: this is the question which came out on 25^th of August in Fergana 2018.

QUESTION: MORE YOUNG PEOPLE ARE LEAVING THEIR RURAL AREAS TO URBAN CITIES TO STUDY AND WORK. WHAT DO YOU THINK ARE THE REASONS? DO ADVANATGES OUTWEIGH ITS DISADVANTAGES?

So here are the two action words such as “what do you think are the reasons” and “do advantages outweigh its disadvantages”.

So when you read the question you should definitely imagine in a very short period of time about how many paragraphs your essay should contain.

For example, in this essay you need to have a total of five bodies:

Introduction
Reasons
Disadvantages
Disadvantages or advantages (if you think it has more advantages then 30% talk about its disadvantages and then 70% about advantages).
Conclusion

Let’s start from introduction! First, simply paraphrase the question and give two reasons and mention whether it has more advantages or disadvantages.

Urban cities are witnessing more and more people moving in for the sake of education and job. In my opinion, this is mainly because of the environment as well as opportunities that cities offer. I also believe, although there are advantages, migration of junior citizens to urban centers can lead to too many problems.

When use “although” it means this point of yours is not as strong as the next point you are going to mention. You don’t have to mention everything in your introduction because your essay should be attractive and doesn’t have to give every detail of your whole essay. Make it INTERESTING!

So in my introduction, I am giving two reasons including environment and opportunities in cities and thus, people are migrating to cities. I am also saying it has more disadvantages because it will bring TOO many problems. Now, what we have to do is to write one body that only includes our TWO reasons:

Firstly, the reason for most young individuals willing to enroll at universities in cities is due to the environment, which is hard to exist in countries. In other words, cities are the hubs of confounding flurry of activities where students can learn not only through books but also experience, which in turn will enable them to get the most out of education. Secondly, more people leaving their home town is also owing to the job opportunities, which means cities offer the promise of social mobility. At the moment, the gap between haves and have-nots in cities is far less than in rural areas and this implies that cities now are the powerful vehicles to create wealth. Moreover, people enjoying the city life are finding it easier to reach the apex of the career ladder.

First, you have to give one reasons, which should be related to education (please see the question… MORE YOUNG PEOPLE ARE LEAVING THEIR RURAL AREAS TO URBAN CITIES TO STUDY AND WORK…). Second reason should be about work. It is IMPORTANT that you MUST understand the question deeply. Now, we will discuss the advantages- 30% (one advantages is enough) and disadvantages-70% (two or three disadvantages are perfect). Let’s see it!

Having more students and employees in big cities would result in decrease of unemployment but there will also be more drawbacks. One evident benefit is that it would enable students and jobseekers to find a job as urban areas are the engines of economic success. However, there are obvious disadvantages. First, the more people come to cities the more accommodation they need and if governments do not tackle this problem humanely, they will end up living in awful conditions. Second, even if countries find a way to accommodate all, we will go into environment crisis, namely carbon footprint. This would not only be a green problem, but also a major security threat. As a result, the next conflicts, wars and terrorist attacks will be triggered.

Use “however” when you are starting the contradicting or opposing point! If you can see I talked a bit about the plus side but EXAGGARATED the disadvantages side.

Another example for you to understand: Do advantages of marrying Natasha outweigh its disadvantages? So I would like to choose the disadvantages side and so, I have to give one disadvantage and give more disadvantages like “although Natasha is beautiful girl and worth marrying, she even has no idea about cooking, gets up at 10 a.m. very late and never cleans her house”. It means she has more disadvantages and it is better to marry another girl. If you can’t understand well after this example then you have something missing in your brain and I beg you to go to see a neurologist ASAP (lol). Let’s see the easiest part of our essay- conclusion. You must restate your reasons and re-mention that it has more disadvantages and give recommendation or prediction.

In conclusion, young people will not stop leaving their rural areas unless they find opportunities in their own countryside and while there are plus points of this migration, too much would be lost as a result. Therefore, governments should stop practicing favoritism towards cities in particular and should invest more in the countries.

Use simple and natural linking words like “to conclude”, “to sum up”, “in conclusion”, “in summary” and never use long memorized linking words like “by a way of conclusion” etc. if you looked at my recommendation, you already have a question of what is CSR. Just Google it and read. Let’s see our essay as a whole. It looks tantalizing, isn’t it?

QUESTION: MORE YOUNG PEOPLE ARE LEAVING THEIR RURAL AREAS TO URBAN CITIES TO STUDY AND WORK. WHAT DO YOU THINK ARE THE REASONS? DO ADVANATGES OUTWEIGH ITS DISADVANTAGES?

Model Answer by: Baha

Urban cities are witnessing more and more people moving in for the sake of education and job. In my opinion, this is mainly because of the environment as well as opportunities that cities offer. I also believe, although there are advantages, migration of junior citizens to urban centers can lead to too many problems.

Firstly, the reason for most young individuals willing to enroll at universities in cities is due to the environment, which is hard to exist in countries. In other words, cities are the hubs of confounding flurry of activities where students can learn not only through books but also experience, which in turn will enable them to get the most out of education. Secondly, more people leaving their home town is also owing to the job opportunities, which means cities offer the promise of social mobility. At the moment, the gap between haves and have-nots in cities is far less than in rural areas and this implies that cities now are the powerful vehicles to create wealth. Moreover, people enjoying the city life are finding it easier to reach the apex of the career ladder.
Having more students and employees in big cities would result in decrease of unemployment but there will also be more drawbacks. One evident benefit is that it would enable students and jobseekers to find a job as urban areas are the engines of economic success. However, there are obvious disadvantages. First, the more people come to cities the more accommodation they need and if governments do not tackle this problem humanely, they will end up living in awful conditions. Second, even if countries find a way to accommodate all, we will go into environment crisis, namely carbon footprint. This would not only be a green problem, but also a major security threat. As a result, the next conflicts, wars and terrorist attacks will be triggered.
In conclusion, young people will not stop leaving their rural areas unless they find opportunities in their own countryside and while there are plus points of this migration, too much would be lost as a result. Therefore, governments should stop practicing favoritism towards cities in particular and should invest more in the countries.

This essay has word count of over 360. If you are aiming for 8 then you better stop at 280-90 words and if it is 9 then you can write over 300 but make sure your essay is fully and well organized. There is no FIXED word count (at least you have to write 250 words). In the following paragraphs I have provided useful information and exercises for you (if you have any question related to other types of essays just contact me). NOTE: if you really know how to write one type of essay very very very well, you should then be able to write other essays while having a party on the top floor dancing for Munisa Rizayeva’s song!

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