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How To Write The Main Body Paragraphs
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For the 3
rd
and 4
th
paragraphs, you will extend the main ideas
mentioned in paragraph 2. You need to add more details in the form of
exact figures and information to support the main ideas and trends
mentioned in your overview. Remember to compare and contrast as well.
When giving specific data, you have to include exact numbers/percentages
and include as many details as possible. Since the exact numbers might be
difficult to read in some cases, you can use words like around, about, and
approximately.
Take a look at the following sample main body paragraphs. Pay
attention to how we’ve used the language in bold:
To begin, in 2012, the Finance industry started at 6%, whereas the
Automotive Industry accounted for 4% of the total GDP. During the next
four years, the levels for both categories remained relatively stable at
around 6% and 8%, with the Finance sector remaining slightly higher
overall, despite a small decrease between 2014 and 2016.
 
However, a considerable change can be seen between the two
categories in the next four years of the given period. The income generated
from the Finance sector increased dramatically to 12% in 2018 and then
nearly 15% in 2020, while the Automotive Industry saw little change,
increasing to only 8 %. By the end of the period, the GDP percentage
from the Finance sector was nearly double that of the Automotive industry
at 15% and 8% respectively.
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Full Sample Response 1
The bar chart depicts the percentage of Gross Domestic
Product from the Automotive and Finance industries in
Australia between 2012 and 2020.
Overall, it can be seen that although both categories
increased as a percentage of GDP, Finance had much more
significant growth in ratio during the given time period.
To begin, in 2012, the Finance industry started at 6%,
whereas the Automotive Industry accounted for 4% of the
total GDP. During the next four years, the levels for both
categories remained relatively stable at around 6% and 8%,
with the Finance sector remaining slightly higher overall,
despite a small decrease between 2014 and 2016.
However, a considerable change can be seen between
the two categories in the next four years of the given period.
The income generated from the Finance sector increased
dramatically to 12% in 2018 and then nearly 15% in 2020,
while the Automotive Industry saw little change, increasing to
only 8 %. By the end of the period, the GDP percentage from
the Finance sector was nearly double that of the Automotive
industry at 15% and 8% respectively.
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