I don’t blame my brother for how I turned out, of course. He may have given me the nickname, but I’m the one who
let that nickname determine how I felt about myself. I could have worn the name proudly—after all, Disney’s Dumbo
is a hero. Disney knew what he was doing when he created the Dumbo character—he’s someone most of us can relate
to, and he has a lot to teach children.
Even without reading the body of the essay, it is evident that the last sentence of the
second conclusion
doesn’t relate closely to the thesis. The writer leaves his reader with thoughts about a movie and its creator, and
not about his nickname and how it affected his sense of self. The first conclusion is successful
because it maintains
close ties with the thesis, even
as it draws a new conclusion, or gives a new understanding, about that thesis.
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