There are two main problems with the text. Firstly, because there are no linking words, the ideas appear unconnected. - There are two main problems with the text. Firstly, because there are no linking words, the ideas appear unconnected.
- The second problem occurs in the second paragraph, where the writer does not use a linking word to show the reader he is about to make a contrast between two sentences:
- "All our products come with a year's guarantee. You may like to consider buying insurance."
- As a result, the reader could find it difficult to see the connection between the two sentences.
Improved text: - Dear Mr Green
- Please find enclosed the brochure you requested, containing information on the whole range of computers that we stock.
- All our products come with a year's guarantee. However, you may like to consider buying insurance for some of the computers. In fact, we can give you favorable terms for insurance on laptops.
- I hope that you find a computer suited to your needs. Please do not hesitate to contact me if you would like further information or if you have any other questions.
- Yours sincerely
- John Higgins
- In this version, linking words have been used and the text is easier to follow.
- Words such as "however" link two ideas and show a contrast between them. You
- could also write "Although our products come with a year's guarantee, you may
- like to consider buying insurance for some of the computers."
List of linking words and phrases Giving examples - For example
- For instance
- Namely
- Namely This reference word allows you to introduce names and to be specific.
- "The top-performing markets, namely Singapore, Malaysia and Japan, have
- exceeded their budgets. Congratulations to all three sales teams!"
- And
- In addition
- As well as
- As well
- Also
- Too
- Furthermore
- Moreover
- Apart from
- In addition to
- Besides
- In fact
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