Day 2 (Mar 1) Writing Answers

WORD COUNT: 231
BAND SCORE: 7.0 - 7.5

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Day 2 ONLINE WRITING CHALLENGE
IMPROVED VERSION:
Overall, the bar chart and pie chart provide a comparison of the weekly hours
worked and the percentage of professionals suffering from stress-related diseases
across eight professions. It is evident that there is no clear correlation between the
number of hours worked and the incidence of stress-related illnesses.
The bar chart reveals that business people work the highest number of hours per
week, with an average of almost 75 hours, followed by movie producers who work
approximately 60 hours a week. Doctors work an average of 50 hours, while writers
and programmers work between 40 to 45 hours per week. Lawyers, chefs, and
lecturers have the lowest weekly hours worked, ranging between 25 to 30 hours per
week.
In contrast, the pie chart shows that lecturers have the highest percentage of
stress-related illnesses, accounting for 25%, despite working the lowest number of
hours. Movie producers and doctors follow closely behind, with 18% and 15%,
respectively. The percentage of stress-related illnesses among business people,
chefs, lawyers, writers, and programmers ranges between 5% to 11%, with relatively
lower figures.
In summary, while business people work the highest number of hours, they do not
necessarily experience the highest incidence of stress-related illnesses. Lecturers,
who work the fewest hours, experience the highest incidence of stress-related
illnesses, followed by movie producers and doctors. Therefore, the number of hours
worked does not seem to be the only factor that influences stress-related illnesses in
the workplace.
WORD COUNT: 239
BAND SCORE: 8.0 +

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