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16- In order to achieve success, self-esteem is considered to be very 
necessary.
What are some of the factors affecting self-esteem?
Use specific reasons to support your opinion. 
People’s motivations, goals, inspirations, loves, and health are profoundly 
affected by an important machine inside themselves called self-esteem. This 
machine enables the person to keep going in life and answers the question 
“Why am I here?” Self-Esteem can be called “the motivator.” It’s a drive to do 
well, succeed in life, and represent the “natural selected” group of society that 
will survive and reproduce.
Self-Esteem is influenced primarily by social activity with others. If a group of 
friends wanted to do things and one of the boys kept bringing up ideas but 
was always put down by his cohorts, it would bring down his self-esteem from 
ever saying anything again. This would have a harmful effect on children and 
their progression towards high goals in life. The lack of self-esteem in early 
childhood could lead them towards a swamp of depression, lack of motivation, 
and loneliness. Instead of achieving a job or extending their education, they 
might be stuck in jail for drugs or robbery.
However, self-esteem is not completely based on appraisals by others. The 
person might have a family background or successful jobs and high positions. 
This might turn on the machine towards higher self-esteem. It is true that 
experiences with others will increase or decrease self-esteem; however, the 
importance of staying strong and believing in oneself will also contribute to a 
higher self-esteem.
In conclusion, without self-esteem inside the person, the road would have 
dead-ends, bumps, and other obstacles. And parents and individual 
themselves must care about the self-esteem issue so that they will achieve 
happiness and success in life. 
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