Some people say that to prevent illness and disease, governments should focus more on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems


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1. Many concerned parties today feel that crime has already been reduced as much as is realistically possible. 2. While I agree this may be true in nations where security is prioritized over privacy rights, there is still tremendous progress that can be made globally.

  1. Paraphrase the overall essay topic.

  2. Write a clear opinion. Read more about introductions here.

1. Those who argue crime no longer needs addressing point to technological innovations. 2. This situation is most apparent in authoritarian nations. 3. Security surveillance can include the use of street cameras, digital tracking, and eavesdropping on private communications. 4. For instance, in South Korea the crime rate in most urban areas is negligible and the average person reports little anxiety about possible criminality, in contrast to periods in the past when there were more instances of robbery, assault, theft, pickpocketing, and so on. 5. These technological shifts have greatly aided law enforcement in prosecuting criminals thereby also increasing the deterrence of potential offences.

  1. Write a topic sentence with a clear main idea at the end.

  2. Explain your main idea.

  3. Develop it with specific or hypothetical examples.

  4. Keep developing it fully.

  5. You might add a counterpoint here.

1. However, crime still exists and can be countered by addressing the deeper, societal roots. 2. The main cause of all crime is poverty. 3. When individuals earn a wage sufficient to maintain a decent standard of living, the entire motive for most crimes disappears. 4. The evidence for this is that in wealthy countries where there is a relatively even distribution of wealth, the crime rates are low and the police do not require draconian punishment or surveillance techniques. 5. Beyond income, it is also possible to invest in improving mental health. 6. Many people today spend too much time online and are vulnerable to extremist views. 7. A still significant proportion of crimes could be eliminated by encouraging people to spend more time outdoors in their community.


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