Ielts essay Clinic Targeted Feedback pdf 2 Your Main Body Paragraphs

Topic Sentence 
Student sample
In recent years, the best atraction points from a city are mostly 
explored by people from other countries than locals. This phenomen 
has ocurred mainly because population has lost interest in culture and 
history therefore mesures like advertising or reductions on prices may 
be imposed in order to regain locals attention.
Examiner Feedback- No clear main idea in the first sentence. 
Advice- Do not paraphrase the general topic again. Instead, answer the 
question clearly in your topic sentence by stating one clear main idea. 
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Topic Sentence 
Student sample
 
In modern times, local residents seem disinterested in visiting historical sites 
and museums in their vicinity compared to tourists because they have become 
familiar with these sites and the history is a part of their identity and 
background. However, these sites are places of interest and adventure to 
tourists and foreigners who have little or no knowledge about the history of 
the town, so it is only natural for the museums and historical sites to hold 
more appeal for them and be visited so as to learn more about the culture of 
the people of that town.
Examiner Feedback- No clear central topic because multiple main ideas in topic 
sentence. 
Advice- Pick one main idea and fully develop that main idea. 
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